Leo Espinosa May 23, 2006
I like the story, and of course the art. My only comment is that the frames are a little disctracting, too thick. Remember that in comics, storytelling is key and anything that you can do to make the story clear should be done.
Imagine if for instance you brake the bottom frame and... hmmm, too long to explain with words. let me doodle something and I'll email it to you.